Somber and damp was the overcast street as the raindrops swipe at my face, pulling me into radiant yellow streetlights above. Tearing my way, a shadowy van comes into my view. I am vigilant of the vehicle, attempting to avoid the inevitable that caused redundant killings every day. I come to a halt in the grim environment, a deer in the headlights, my brain kaput. I have nothing. I do nothing. I think nothing. Some would say my life flashed before my very eyes, yet I stand, no avoidance available in my blank, blank mind. SCREEEEEEECH I am nothing.
Linda what a superb piece of writing. The vocabulary used is of a terrific standard and there is a great structure and flow to your writing. I also like how you use Italics and Bold for effect. Keep up the great work.
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Mrs Skinner (team100) Bristol UK
2/2/2015 02:33:33 am
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Mrs Beverley, Team100wc
2/2/2015 05:48:06 am
An outstanding piece, with fantastic pace, use of repetition and sentence structure all under control. WELL DONE! Keep writing!
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Jenny Horne
2/6/2015 03:18:23 am
Fabulous! You're so awesome. -Ms. Horne
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Maria Ramirez
2/6/2015 03:25:59 am
Wow... I will be reading your novels some day soon young lady. :-)
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Wendy Caress
2/8/2015 10:30:56 am
Great work, Linda! I am so very proud of you. Keep writing, you never know where it will take you!
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My name is Linda, and anything technological and fun is my fling! Due to my love for writing and video games, movies and television alike, I blog about reviewing my interests!